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Tuesday, May 22, 2012

A Freaky Week!!



Four nights ago it started, seeing the shape again now made me shudder.
 I slowly crept back under my blanket wishing to not see it again and that I was only dreaming!
The wind was blowing and the trees were swishing. The wind made a creepy noise as it blew
across my room. It was a dark night and I was all alone.
I then slowly got out of my bed and went to have  a look at what the creepy shadow was. The
freaky shadow was just standing there looking into my window. It was just a dark patch shaped
like a man and so I couldn’t see what it really was. As I stood there I felt fear from the bottom of
my toes to the top of my head! I quickly ran back and jumped back onto my bed, hiding under
my blanket. I did not move a muscle. I then said to myself, “maybe if I just went to sleep, my fear
would go away and maybe tomorrow the scary shadow will be gone. I tried to make myself go to
sleep but I just couldn't!
The next night I went to sleep , I went and peeked through my window curtain and looked if that
freaky shadow was gone, but it was not!  I thought that someone has been watching me through
out the whole week. I went back into my bed, wishing that nothing bad will happen to me. All of a
sudden a car coming down the road (who had their flashlights on) shone their light on the dark
shadow. It was hard to believe but to my amazement it was only
just a mailbox.
That night I was really happy to go to sleep knowing that I had nothing to worry about.

Thanks to Mr Wright, from Oakland University, for helping me with my voice over and my writing. 

1 comments:

Anonymous said...

Your expression on the audio shows that you have started to really think about the needs of the reader. This also reflects into your much tighter editing.
For next time, work on 'tone of voice' to express those things in your story like shock, being scared and relief.
Well done, Mr H

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