BAAAM!! went the clapper and off we went!
Jogging slowly across the field, I could feel my shoes getting heavier and heavier. Running past the first cone was a relief but then as I kept on running it got very slippery and muddy so it slowed me down a bit ... well it slowed down all the girls I was competing with.
When we got out of the school fence that was where the disgusting mud was waiting for us. I stood there for a while and had a look at it and in my head I was like “Oh no” but I had no chance but to go through it so I did. Splish splash splish splash the mud went as I was trying to get through it. It was so bad that the mud got up to my knees.
As I ran past Mrs Tuala she was cheering me on by saying “go Gila” and it made me push myself to run.
Running through the bushes was really hard and scary at the same time because the track was like on the end of a cliff and it was slippery. I had to watch out because there were broken branches lying on the ground and some puddles. Not long after running through the bushes, I could hear Mr Jacobson talking on the microphone. That as a sign to me that I was nearly there and to my amazement I was right. It was a relief getting out of the bushes!
Finally the it was all finish! running past the finish line was the most amazing feeling that day! At the end it wasn’t so bad and I am actually happy that I participated in cross country.
Thanks to Stevie for checking my work!
4 comments:
Heey Vanila,
I like the story. Mostly like the vocabulary words that you used for your story, they are very good words. My FAVORITE bit is how you wrote in "Mr Jacobson talking on the microphone. That as a sign." VERY GOOD WORK!!!
Iron
Good on you Vanila! I understand how hard it must have felt when you were in the middle of the course. I really like how you explain your thoughts and feelings during the course and then when you had completed it. It's always a good thing to push yourself further than your comfort zone. Malo lava le taumafai!
Hello Vanila,
I really like it that you have wrote allot for your writing with lots of detail. I like it that your are a house captain. I can imagine running around the course you ran. Hope you keep up the good work and write more.
Tina.
Hi Vanila,
I really like how you showed not tell. I really like how you described the feeling of your shoes.
I hope to see you very soon
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